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Thursday 18 October 2012

Redie Ware Hood-part 3

With a blink Hood sprinted...sprinted for the house. Who's was it? Silly question, Redie knew whose house it was, Hood didn't. Hood was nearly at the house now, her ginat gaping hole in her face overflowing with syliva. Licking away the wet fluid oozing from her mouth Hood pushed past tree's and bushes, violently ripping them down as her anxiety grew bigger and bigger. She was there now. Hood felt as if she had known the house all her life...who's was it? With a terrifying howl Redie smashed threw the front door, only leaving claw scratches where the hinges once were. A blood curdling scream filled the forest as Hood sunk her teeth into the cold, thin flesh that was once pink with life, now just a sight of blood. Hood had done it. As Hood wiped the blood away from her vile mouth, she fell to the floor with sweat dripping of her palms...why was this happening? Hood could no longer clench her hands and as she soon found out she could no longer walk, she closed her eyes and howled to let out the tension building up inside her head and with that her vision went black.

2 comments:

  1. this is reaally really good! you successfully built up tension and a dramatic effect without being to...what shall i say...umm...'twilighty?' if you understand me? I work for a book publishing company and it's talent like you that needs to be spotted! what an amazing first 3 chapters-keep up the amazing work!

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  2. wow. thank you so much! i really did want to get the dramatic effect across with tension without being to cheesy? Though I don't think twilight is cheesy-i think they're superbly written books keeping the reader wanting to read on full-time! thank you so much for commenting. do you keep a blog?

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